a excerpt from chapter 1 second draft!

Chapter 1: The birth of two legends

1:06 am 2026 AD in a small medical clinic

Thunder clapped in the air as a John Doe waited patiently as the women attended to his wife Jane. The world was in chaos that night black clouds filled the sky. Many would have said this was a dark omen, but half way around the world a circle of 12 congregated on their mountain top lair to watch the ether flow and deemed this a most glorious night. No one except The 12 new the future and no one expected this day to come so soon.

The sky flashed again and again like a strobe light revealing the dark ceremony of the thunder storm. The clinic shook as another roaring rumble of thunder swept through the night. Just down the hallway in a brightly lit room a group of mid wives worked feverishly. It was then the double doors flung open and in walked Esther everyone stood ready as it was now time.

“Make sure the mother in comfortable” Esther commanded the others

There only response was to grab some cool fresh cloths make sure Jane was in the best position to give birth to her new born baby. Jane and John really had no intention of keeping the child. They never really where in the best position to be bringing in new life, but it happened anyway. As they have always believed the universe provides all for all who accept it and carry on spreading love.

The thunder sounded again as Esther bend over to wipe the sweat from Jane’s head. “You and your child will make it through this” Esther whispered softly into Jane’s ear.

“I just want to make sure he survives” she winced back in the throngs of pain from another contraction.

“The Child is ready to come into this world” Said the midwife who was monitoring dilation for the right moment to get the child out of his mother’s womb.

“You need to push now it’s time to push” Esther said with a firm commanding voice that suggested years and thousands of children delivered successfully in this room.

Jane let out a winded cry as she summoned all her strength for the final moments of this 14 hour ordeal. “Just breathe” She kept muttering to herself. As the moment drew near she inhaled, exhaled and kept muttering “breathe” in her mind to herself.

“Push, push now” Bellowed Esther, while the others in the room where busy doing other tasks and wiping sweat from Jane’s brow. Sally a bright young blonde woman was busy filling a basin to wash the child. Dallas was busy getting a blade sharpened and sterilized to cut the cord. Jane began to push with all her might wincing in pain but she never vocalized it. This was her and john’s only goal.

Jane let slip a mighty cry as if Freya herself was giving birth to a new god sun. She pushed one last time. She knew it was the last one as a great relief from the pressure was lifted from her womb her son was born. Quickly Dallas severed the cord connecting mother and child. As Sally plucked the baby from Esther’s arms and took the child to the basin to wash off the covering of his former home in his mother’s womb. It wasn’t until the little child was handed back to her did it hit Jane.

“I hear our life goals have been completed” bellowed John as he walked through the double doors, of the delivery room to view Jane and his creation for the planet. As he sit by Jane’s side he stared into his new son’s eye’s and thought “what have we really done”. He kissed the baby on the forehead and then kissed his partner Jane’s lips. Then embraced the whole family with his arms and said “I love you both, let us sit hear till morning nurse him now so that he may know his mother’s milk this one time.

After the women of the small clinic for the destitute left the room satisfied everyone was safe and healthy for the night, Jane and John and the little baby fell into a deep sleep. The fly’s on the walls spoke of this night, they told the universe “it was, as if three dogs where dreaming of running. We sensed the vivid dreams and where chased here to this place by the black birds as their spies” . it was one of the last times the whole family would be together in a loving safe place.

Elsewhere the mountain Shamans where busy muttering amongst themselves.

“All the signs are right” said the tallest

“Yes but how do we know for sure he is the one?” asked another

“No, no this is indeed a new blessing on the world by the universal conciseness, I consulted the stones. It is absolute in our traditions” Commanded the eldest of the group at 419 years old.

“We will see” said the youngest of the group at 120 years old

Then at once all twelve said “Only time will tell but he is now hear let us watch out for this soul and guide it well”

Notes this is only half of chapter one if you guessed by the title their is one more child to be born. writing a child birth scene as a dude is really hard i had to think back to that time i had a really big kidney stone, I still probably fucked it up but i am not about to go making bastards just to interview someone about child birth. it still needs a little spit and polish and i need to look up the rules for conversations but this a great second draft and please feel free to comment on it and i could use formatting tips for proper look or something! hope you guys enjoyed this was a thrill to write and i cant wait till i actually get close to finishing this epic task as well as my poetry books then I’ll maybe tell more people i write lol. Just for context the reason Jane and john doe are just that they are only important for this moment in the book and the series but perhaps they will come back in the future from well their junkie habit and miss guided ways.


Published by: mitch fourtwenty

I write fiction, do street art, used to paint trains but that's really hard when your old, they just always seemed so dull and NY had better trains then we did with more color so i always liked throwing paint at my trains, I have one main blog which is my idea board which you are probably free to steel from just don't let me catch you with my more professional lawyers, I was depressed at one point in life because people kept pointing out i was different then them thanks, I guess i am, I don't fit in anywhere particular but I'm pretty happy because it seems like instead i fit in everywhere. I occasionally use grape vines to talk at some people, which are slow but un hack-able, I'm also my own medical researcher and a host of other nifty job titles i don't mind doing for myself it makes me happier each day! I am intelligent to the point where i'm hyper curious about things so i tend to ask alot of question about stuff if peole dont piss on me for having the super human ability of curiosity which keeps me learning despite a system that turned its back on me long ago, I still survive and write, one day i might go public but considering I'm probably wanted in my home town and don't even know it because i never got caught i don't often clue people in on who i am on earth, on the inter webs. while i have many masks that may seems scary even to some people I'm genuinely just a man making his community a better place to live for everyone he talks to that ever had a sad story who erased my metal ass face? I liked my metal face?

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